V.P. Nana

I love this because I already want to root for the MC just from this pitch!

08.10.2025 14:32 — 👍 1    🔁 0    💬 0    📌 0

This sounds lovely!

08.10.2025 14:31 — 👍 1    🔁 0    💬 0    📌 0

sorry this is late! got busy on my end.

Ah, I see what you mean. I think that even with them meeting later, if they are the MCs, then that’s what I think you should also use as a pitch. Especially because they are the MCs. And glad I could help in some way. Good luck to you!🥰

30.09.2025 18:31 — 👍 2    🔁 0    💬 0    📌 0

The other stuff, such as Alex’s brother—unless he plays a significant role that he must be mentioned—can help you get across who Alex is as a human-fused-monster and who Sofia is as a psychic monster lover.

I hope this helps. really intriguing story you have!😊

29.09.2025 20:57 — 👍 0    🔁 0    💬 1    📌 0

Okay, so I read your other pitches, and I think it’s great you’re trying to come from do angLes, but they lose a bit of connection and cohesion.

First, is Alex Sofia’s partner? If so, maybe mention him. Second, is Sofia the girl Alex dreams of? If so, maybe mention her.

I think removing some of

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Losing each other, so that Alex as the MC still has the focus on him.

“Or Alex and his brother will lose the only family each other has.“

It may help to create a stronger connection with your characters and your pitch jump out even more.😊

29.09.2025 20:47 — 👍 1    🔁 0    💬 0    📌 0

Hi there! Mod here.😊 really love this pitch, but I think you can focus it just a bit more in that last line. Instead of Alex’s brother, maybe keep the focus on Alex. first, maybe say how he has to evade the hunter. I’m assuming he can only do this for so long. Second, focus on Alex and his brother

29.09.2025 20:47 — 👍 1    🔁 0    💬 1    📌 0

You’re welcome! Happy to help.😊

29.09.2025 14:25 — 👍 1    🔁 0    💬 0    📌 0

DVpit mod here. Great pitch! Just one little note: I would hyphenate “spotlight hungry,” so your pitch reads a bit more smoothly.

29.09.2025 14:21 — 👍 1    🔁 0    💬 1    📌 0

A family of splitgill mushrooms grow aligned on the edge of an upturned branch in a bare winter forest. They look like seashells on wet stone All photos by me

Here are some nice mushrooms

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❤️

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